June

[intjonathan]

warm pavement
smell of blackberries
at sunset

Comments

[niralisse.livejournal.com]

While the english haiku has traditionally been 5-7-5 to match the japanese syllable count, some believe that due to differences in language that english haiku in 3-5-3 would be more in the spirit of the original form. 5 syllables is a lot in english - easily 5 words - but in japanese you can say very little. I've wanted to try the form for a while and when I stumbled upon this 8-syllable phrase I wanted to keep, it seemed a natural fit.

[huggybee.livejournal.com]

Very pretty. I love picking blackberries.

[laurelana-jones.livejournal.com]

that's super interesting! i like haiku... in fact it's generally the only kind of poetry i can write.

haiku is like the "snapshot" of the poetry world... which would explain why i like it, since photography is my visual art of choice.

[ex-athelstan105.livejournal.com]

Since when is the pavement warm at sunset?

[niralisse.livejournal.com]

Well, on hot days, the roads are often still warm after dark. You see it more in warmer states like California, but it happens here too.

Also, the haiku is in two parts, really, so the 3rd line does not necessarily apply to the 1st one. At least, it didn't when I thought of it.